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    dots Submission Name: Iron Castdots

    Author: Lostlover
    ASL Info:    18/male/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 96/99/53
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIron Castdots

    My thoughts are cast in iron
    They are the cornerstone
    The great foundation
    My every fiber is in their sanctity.
    They are unbreachable—
    Try and stop the wind from blowing
    Stop the sun from rising—
    The effort is just as futile
    As would be to steal my thoughts.

    Submitted on 2008-10-20 05:28:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If you don't stand for something, you will fall for anything. I don't remember who said that, Grampa Walton perhaps?

    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice. I love the finality presented here, the cold iron truth that thoughts are unique and aren't something that can be taken away. So many of our freedoms, our liberties can be supressed or even taken away, but what we think, our own thoughts, are the one thing that can NEVER be taken away. This short poem expresses that perfectly. I also like how you conveyed thoughts as the cornerstone and the foundation of yourself. I also agree with that 100%. This poem presents great fact and great truth within its words. This is a really nice poem. Thoughts are what a man can be judged by, the one true measuring stick that is incorruptible. Good poem.
    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by FlickerofHope | [ Reply to This ]

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