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    dots Submission Name: I didn't eat today but, I medicateddots

    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 922
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       I cooked, and fed. As they ate, I drank.

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    dotsI didn't eat today but, I medicateddots

    I never catch a wink of sleep,
    without these sleeping pills I eat each night
    that have been helping me dream.
    And all the sheep riding i'm doing
    over fences several feet taller than me..

    it's one after another - untill it's all I can remember

    But, now i'm remembering something else
    your face and those eyes,
    with mine they will then meet,
    it feels like the first time we've ever seen one another,
    but, we're so seemingly familiar

    It's okay it's getting darker with the weather
    we're here together and in company
    with you makes everything a hundred times better
    so it's so-so comforting

    You told me the sky would soon then open up,
    tearing us apart limb from limb,
    you said, it's never enough!
    It's so easy to love but, we'll always hate them!

    You said, we'd expand outwardly
    into the atmosphere, we'd be apart of something
    something apart of everything with our pieces
    bestowed out everywhere

    Submitted on 2008-10-20 17:46:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hm... I dunno, I feel this is more of a search for something than a finished poem. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I might be wrong plz tell me if i am, i like the picture you painted 3/4 of the way though gave a godd calm somber feeling to it and the last 1 or 2 stanza/s seemed like you whipped around the poem to seem like the medication was wearing off, if that was your intention, bravo. if not i might need medication, still a good read ty.

    GJ - ~.^- L.o.
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]

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