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    dots Submission Name: Binds of Beguiledots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1038
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       For Tomislav - because his eyes know the secret.


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    dotsBinds of Beguiledots
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    I would not be lost without you,
    My most endearing dream - my colorful starlight.
    I would fall victim to the abyss of the past lives
    That were never meant to be lived - or intertwined
    In a warm armor of a coldblood.

    I would not be hurt without you,
    My most uncanny secret - my jewel of the stark horizon.
    I would be, of a crown of desecrated mirth,
    The queen of thousand cries for the deaf
    And my heart could not be saved.

    I would not be lonesome without you,
    My flight of the silver owls - my brilliant night of peace.
    I would be, in the ranks of devourers,
    As serried with voices of cruelty and blaze
    As a man is with his disease.

    I would not be dying without you,
    My key of the Nile - my rain on the late of June.
    I would, in the storms of my blood,
    Pour existence out the walks of the planets
    Around the Star that can not glisten without you -

    - and my poems would be forfeit to perfect darkness.






    Submitted on 2008-10-20 22:12:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I would not 'see' poetry without you,
    Or the sublime spirit of dance,
    With the letters
    That given a chance -
    Become a defense
    Agaist
    An universe that matters.

    :)
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
      Many of these stanzas were very powerful and required a second/third read...this piece made my heart ache which seems appropriate.

    Very engaging!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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