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    dots Submission Name: Gulls At The Brink of “Lands End” dots
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    Author: col13x
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    dotsGulls At The Brink of “Lands End” dots
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    Gulls At The Brink of “Lands End”

    Traces in tactile blue
    The simple slide
    Sky

    “And I
    Thrown past thought
    Beyond import
    Side by side impromptu”

    Slide

    Catch it
    Catch that wing
    Reverse revolving
    Simple slide
    On a vista where I cannot breathe I must breathe hold that moment catch the wing everything is falling

    And
    Formulation to the dusted
    Speckles of light
    Dances with water

    Marching now
    Marching with the clouds
    Pomp and fluff of rain
    I could fall a thousand miles
    On this wing
    I could fall forever

    Slide
    Simple slide

    Perfect monument wheels heady
    Soaring slip beneath
    Floated
    In the mouths of rocky crags
    Waves suck and draw booming

    Crashing
    Slide
    Simplicity breathing
    Air winded compulsion forming
    I have become the nurturing of salt
    Formed from eggs
    Acrobat traversing the edge of spray


    And written my psalm
    Ovation my call
    To the voice of the sea
    I slide
    Traces in tactile blue
    The Simple slide
    Sky


    I am about the feathers of the cliff









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      HO....LY....SHIT....

    Dude, you have no idea how much I love you right now. In a poetic way, of course.

    This is...eternally beautiful. I love birds, and a lot of my poems include birds and references to flight and sky and so on.

    When I saw the title, I just had to read it.

    Little did I know, I was about to be blown away.

    This reminds me so much of "Jonathan Livingston Seagull", which is one of my favourite books. Maybe that book is the inspiration for this piece, maybe you've already read it.

    If not, I encourage you to. It's such a metaphysical and spiritual journey through the wings of a seagull.

    Simple slide.
    Sky.

    You are sea above, heaven below.

    Great job, man. I'm adding this to my favourites.

    ~Asia
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      I really felt this piece - floating at times and words falling quickly at other points. I enjoyed the "nature" both figuratively and literally and felt this teaming with life in all of "IT's" beauty and conflict.

    Awesome!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      O.o Loved it, you have a good knack of pressing the writting pice right into my vision through your writting style in this one, i felt as i read the poem gave the impression of the title more and more perfect title. you seem like you put more thought into how it felt reading it then the composition of the words (no comp prob BTW) and it worked awesomely. keep writing plz

    GJ - ~.^- L.o.
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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