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Passing Time in the Wilderness

Author: awastedsky
ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116 /151 /98
Words: 14
Class/Type: Haiku /Satire
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no, really.

Passing Time in the Wilderness

Last night, I got drunk
and vomited off a cliff -
how liberating.

Submitted on 2008-10-21 00:26:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i nearly choked on my coffee reading this, and i don,t usually do that while reading haiku,s , probably because the most i have read on here i didn,t understand. but i liked this one, vomitting of a cliff, great line, original.
ps did bukowski ever write any haiku,s? this remminds me of him somehow, must be the drink,
oh and thats a compliment!!
thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
  It is indeed,this is a real haiku,no bull[censored],if everyone wrote hem like this theyed be a lot less pretentious/crap/im-mature/theyed be worth taking the short time to read its a fav,yep,yes it is...

| Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
  ideas? be careful when drinking next to cliffs.
haha. this is funny. i'm not really sure what more can be said.
"how liberating." hahah. wow.
| Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]

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