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    dots Submission Name: maiden spiderland.dots
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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Society
    Total Views: 793
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 523



    Description:
       self-explanatory..thats the dream!


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    dotsmaiden spiderland.dots
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    I'm just one romantic bringing hope into fashion,
    My passion emits through jet plain engines and I fall into trash.
    I turn my back to a lack of compassion
    Volatile,manic,humble and brash?

    Sometimes I wish for marriage
    My days envelope me in
    I'm wishing for binding I can't seem to begin

    Kisses are lost,lacking reverb thereafter

    I Dream of flight, and ecquivocal laughter.


    to b continued..





    Submitted on 2008-10-21 00:26:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The first line is nice so many hopelss romatics out there I was one once many time my hopes dashed. Did you mean jet plane engines? I fall into trash leaves me like what the Fig but its so your style sort of poking fun at poets or classical poetry. Flying is fun.
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece was very disjointed but screamed with a purpose - not just caught in the "web".

    Hope can seem to be lost amidst depression and mundane life but our universal soul cries out for love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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