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    dots Submission Name: The Tiji Sonnetsdots
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    Author: Glen Bowman
    ASL Info:    70 m Oz
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1140/307/186
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2348



    Description:
       A cute gecko once lived behind a picture on the wall at my place, and I started making up stories about it, in free verse. The character evolved into this metaphysical being who symbolizes (for me) how ridiculous everything is. The game is: whenever I notice something serious which also makes sense, Tiji can illustrate how mistaken I was.

    I wondered what she would do to an environment of sonnets, so I made these three. Of course, now I can't take sonnets seriously any more, since I think she ate The God Of Sonnets. She eats gods sometimes, when bugs are scarce. Yes I know this is nonsense, what's the problem? You're not one of Them gods, are you?

    Acknowledgement: One of Tiji's ancestors is quite famous: Archie the cockroach, a poet. His human author was Don Marquis.


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    dotsThe Tiji Sonnetsdots
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    A Story About Some Archetypes

    The Serpent Of Time is proudly winding down
    the serpentine boughs of the lithesome Darwin Tree,
    then hisses at Mr Clay there: "Hey you clown,
    "Who's that lady up on this branch we see?"
    Mr Clay says: "That's no lady, that's Mrs Clay ..."
    But the snake goes: "Fie, be a Serious Mind like me:
    "you need to know there are more days after this day!"
    And so there were, and in one they met Tiji
    (The Gekkonidae from The End Of Time) whose terse
    light conversation ("Tch!"), or philosophy,
    learned in a brutal environment of free verse,
    Mr & Mrs Clay found full of wry glee.
    The Serpent Of Time hissed: "Ignore that gekkonid!"
    But Tiji whispered: "Eat the snake!" So they did.

    *
    Who's Tiji ?

    Tiji stands for 'The Gekkonidae',
    a biological archetype, we'll say.
    She comes (as all those archetypes tend to)
    from The End Of Time's unfutured "day"
    where there's only a swamp - not much to do?
    So Tiji haunts a wild ancestor's life
    that lives behind a picture on a wall,
    and gets that hapless house in frequent strife
    with bored gods Who can't stand The End at all,
    so stumble around Time being surly, gross,
    dumb, arrogant, pestiferous and rife -
    which Mr & Mrs Clay sourly recall
    from eras when they still believed in Those;
    but now - what they don't realize, Tiji knows.

    *

    A Brutal Environment

    It's bilious where the feral Free Verse lurk:
    that environment
    is only fit for
    redundant gods pathetically
    hiring their umbrellas out
    to frantic literary souls
    for obscuring isms
    which Tiji (the gekkonidean archetype, our heroine) quite likes now.
    She hungrily blundered into that realm
    which looked a lot like a ceiling
    with a lighting fixture and bugs,
    but upside-down.
    Stalking closer, all the bugs had umbrellas
    and tried to talk themselves out of getting eaten.

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      I liked the non-sense that became the sense. It's like a satire on If you don't like the thought---change it or consign it to the poo-poo pile. find this write quite hilarious with a tone of bitterness. Those isms are very confusings idiosyncracies. Yes, isms are those things which try to climb to a brighter light but find that an umbrella does cast a more favorable light.
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! I like this! The idea of a Gheko who eats things that are inclined to be too serious is delightful! Considering that arrogance and sin begin with one taking onseself too seriously (persons and institutions alike), a delightful creature that eats those things that are too serious would be a godsend!
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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