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    dots Submission Name: what tomorrow bringsdots
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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 294
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Some events in life, some loves are better not tried. they will leave you empty and unfulfilled.


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    dotswhat tomorrow bringsdots
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    the echoes of the life before
    still linger deep inside.
    the pain it still shows brightly
    it's grown too hard to hide.

    my scars I wear them plainly
    I've held nothing in.
    I'm hoping now for changes
    but where do I begin.

    The cobwebs long ago it seems
    built a wall that none could break.
    built from tangled strands from time
    forged out of all my mistakes.

    I cant let another near
    I cant be there not again.
    dying from regrets of old
    the cost -a love, my kids, some friends.

    I have payed my debt with intrest
    and I've payed for what I've done.
    I've prayed at night "please give me strength"
    and "help me just to overcome"

    Once I lived to hold you tight
    Once I gave you all of me.
    but, so many times have passed
    when you my dear have made me bleed.

    I gave up. I just gave in.
    I wait for you no longer.
    and each day, that you're away,
    I grow that day much stronger.

    Leave me with my walls, and pain
    leave me with all my regrets.
    Taunt me from a distance still
    but know that I have payed my debt.

    You can't hurt me any more
    you lost you chance just let me be.
    The hope has faded day by day
    and left this hole inside of me.

    I can't fill it. can't avoid it
    I can't hide it anymore.
    It's crippled me from all the pain
    and left me half, I was before.

    I hope that you can sleep at night,
    cause mine is filled with haunted dreams.
    my love, forever, I must go
    and wait for what tomorrow brings.







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      i always love to read your poetry michael.

    "I gave up. I just gave in.
    I wait for you no longer.
    and each day, that you're away,
    I grow that day much stronger."

    i loved that! it's so true. i wish i could just get away and start my life over. only i'm not sure i'd be as strong as you. you did a great job on this poem. i can tell you meant every word. they say time heals all wounds... we shall see. just hold on a little longer. =] you always have a friend in me.

    Jen

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    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]
      There are expressions of love that can seem contrary and sometimes there are lessons tough we must experience.

    This piece was very well done and had a consistent flow and meter while still maintaining a message of lost love.

    Live to love another day!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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