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    dots Submission Name: The World is Small Compared to Thisdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    The World is Small Compared to This

    Advancing in the way an aboriginal choir
    passes a word in a platter of sunlight
    moving nature with a wind of thought

    The world is small compared to this

    Pagan breathing sticks eating earth
    palms become rocks with the cores of trees
    perimeters of imagination to the pulse of stone
    living in the life of birth
    breast womb oceans nurturing
    encompassing eternity minutely

    Atom seed body of mind that passes the platter of unity
    like water like fire air and earth
    native the mover of the way

    is you

    tripping on dust and grass and walking the ashes of decades
    walking through your own body

    Instinctual messenger to the will of life
    reach out through plants from stars and forgotten heights
    feel the body
    speak then
    all shall know your name
    rise then
    all shall know your place
    seek out this consequence of being
    has become
    the passage of your soul




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      Huh...this is rather like a shamanic vision and an aboriginal ceremony all rolled into one.

    "speak then
    all shall know your name
    rise then
    all shall know your place"

    I loved that part the best.

    This also reminded me of the scene in Crocodile Dundee where you see the aboriginal guys having their ceremony. Hitting sticks on the ground, jerky movements, odd sounds.

    All quite odd.

    Man, am I ever glad you signed up on ES. You're my kind of poet, dude.

    Great job on this piece.

    ~Asia
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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