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    dots Submission Name: Between The Devil and The Sea dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsBetween The Devil and The Sea dots
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    Between The Devil and The Sea
    ( Scylla and Charybdis )

    Cosmetic the creature cover girl
    is accessible only at night
    a picture female in her temple
    laying askew on an alter ego

    A de lux harlot in romantic rough house
    a fetish target
    frivolous nymphet with a rampant phallus

    And the sinister will follow strictly incognito

    In her sticky sexual paradise
    blond peroxide sensuality comes by proxy

    No virtues abashed
    a blow up doll as she lays in prostrate sultry action
    her deflowering for titillation
    she is said to have a thing for perversion
    this ageless angelica this strip teaser
    the Molotov cocktail of her own euphoria

    Down in the bawdy boulevard men ape their ardor
    all mouth to mouth with the call girl
    a fondle or a blatant grope

    She’s a clock work courtesan to keep her from destitution
    to feed the kids she considers herself to be
    an acquisition
    smiling for the gratuitous exhilaration of playing the other woman
    vogue with her etiquette indiscreet in the burlesque
    self esteem is held between the food the warmth
    and not much else




    Submitted on 2008-10-22 16:18:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Exotic...erotic...hypnotic... and yet it seems to be a metaphor for society if your label set's it right. You should really write descriptions cause the act of understanding your poetry is much alike quantum physics :) and yet it most certainly isn't subtle when it comes to enslaving the senses of the reader with it's potent phrasal ecstasy. I will say it again, your talent is undeniable even if other people sometimes cannot understand you.
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I wonder where this idea came from...? It was beautifully written once again , Cole. You seem to have a great knowledge of vocabulary. You very artfully disguised this poem behind visionary illusions and beautiful vocabulary.

    I did not know what you were speaking of as the poem first began, but as it went on I saw that the woman was no fairy princess, but that of a courtesan. She must do what she must do to provide for the children she has.

    When it comes to you writing it seems you have the ability to make any poem sound good even if there is no rhyming or juncture within the poem. You're poems are perfect the way they are.

    You seem to pertain an immense amount of knowledge behind this world we call the web. Intelligence is definitely on your side. At least in poetry, that is. Continue writing, Cole. I will check up on you from time to time. You have great talent.

    This was a wonderful poem. I would not recommend changing anything in it. It is perfect.
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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