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Into the Unknown

Author: vampirefreak69
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Into the Unknown

Heart racing
Stomach twisting
Skin tingling
Mind pacing
Light, yet heavy
Shaky, yet steady
Off, yet ready
Mind going crazy
Sight so hazy
Too consuming
Back and forth
Might be losing
All confusing
No refusing
Got a hold on me
Grip too tight
No damn way
I can fight
Reduced to this
Left alone
As I stumble
Into the unknown

Submitted on 2008-10-23 02:43:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you personified the emotion, the fear, the uncertainty, the sudden confidence then lack of one experiences when faced with something unfamiliar, unknown

also, the way in which you wrote it was quite fitting in expressing such an emotion, or rather vast array of emotions, that come with facing the unknown

i enjoyed this piece immensly

peace v

| Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]

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