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    dots Submission Name: My Punishmentdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 99/55/48
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 831
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    Description:
       I wrote this seeing how difficult is was for a young friend of mine to live with her parents who's discipline was out of the ordinary being that they would tare her down verbally. Theres time when they do seem like they care but sometime they get carried away. so these are my thoughts and feelings.


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    Fear not the words that I write
    This hate that taunts me every night
    This place that I call my home
    A prison all of my own
    Leave before me my images of fear
    For her I’ll draw but just one tear
    Her punishment makes it hard to feel
    For such as love, with wounds that hardly heal
    I’m losing my focus on what’s wrong or rite
    Releasing my grip on this hope of truth and light
    Leaving me all alone with no world to escape to
    Restricted from the very pages that help me threw
    The devil’s hired hand is testing my fate
    Should I doubt love and learn to hate?
    It’s so hard to believe that I can’t give up
    When though my eyes may open I still can’t wake up
    This heart is all upside down
    Is this truly life that I found?

    Within supposed trust I call out your name
    But all in all, broken hearted, I feel the same
    Bowing my head I try not to hate you
    But from under your rage what can I do?
    Your chosen words that you speak leaves my heart wilted
    Mastering the lashing of your tongue I hope you feel gifted
    I’m fighting just so I can forgive
    But under your eyes I find it difficult to live
    For once I beg of you for just a little remorse
    And I ask, why so much force?




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      Ah. I love it. Many kids are suffering from some type of abuse by their parents and I feel so much emotion in this piece its powerful.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-03-14 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Materialism and mistaken humanism is so rampant today that the very young hardly have a chance to escape to an inner peace. The culture of death(abortion) is sending a sad message to young people as being not wanted in todays societal self agrandisement. I see a great rebellion taking place in today's young generation. Everywhere young people are making their way to the Lord, since He is the One who has a true love and understanding of the problems they are facing. He is their hero. They have heard about His great sufferings done at the hands of people and they see how He with courage an patience was able to change the world.
    | Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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