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    dots Submission Name: Awake Anew A light {experimental}dots

    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       I rarely write descriptions but this poem demands it. In order to truly grasp it you must read it carefully and mind the punctuation marks. The ending line: "They whisper a prayer." is the right interpretation all by itself. I did this as a sort of practice cause practice makes perfect. It's inspired by Lith-Ium's work but it is also an unfamiliar ground to me.

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    dotsAwake Anew A light {experimental}dots

    Your starlight's' broken,
    Twisted fates - forsake
    And run again - deplore -
    This pouring ache;
    Where it reigns
    Tattered in it's quake.

    Still swarming hearts
    Of the vehement - few
    In trembling cold lie - atrophied -
    Lips in blue;
    For the ardent love
    That their eyes pursue.

    A light.
    Before the symphony halts
    And their dreams - still bright
    Desert again - deter -
    Their flight;
    For the stillness
    Of the hurricane night.

    They whisper a prayer.

    Submitted on 2008-10-23 14:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your vernacular. I honestly can't quite grasp its full meaning, and thats due to the fact that I don't know you, but it stirs within me a feeling that is throwing my heart asunder. It tore me down in this, my delicate moment. What is it about this that I can't grasp that mixes me up?
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by jasonsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]
      that was an absolutely lovely poem, very well written, i had to read through it a couple times to get a grasp on what it means, or at least what i believe it to mean as poetry is an abstract art left to the reader's interpretation, but the style was something different and the language marvelous

    what i got was something along the lines of the first stanza speaking of a pain unexpected, the second of a love causing the pain, and the third hopes/ dreams are still alive yet continually disperse causing great distress

    all-in-all, though, many kudos!

    peace v

    | Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      Understand it? no, not really. Do I like it? I love it! It is a highly lyrical piece of verse, short but very excellent. (I have long maintained that to like, or love poetry it is NOT always necessary that we should understand it, and I do have an example I could show you besides this piece...) bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent... hendiatris-licious. :) And yes, I might by too subjective. Since when is the muse allowed to critique the artist? It would be like critisizing parts of its own essence.

    It inspired a feeling today. And I'll quote from my diary. (:P)

    "(...) Different minds, different universes ... the diffuse light within the Theatre of Existence, lingering on the borders of each... I am alone. Was, am, ... will be. Like every Being stripped of delusions. The Self is much to important to be sold... to ideas, dreams, ... 'others'.

    Yet I am able, no, entitled, to 'connect' from 'time to thought' to beings 'like minded'. To travel through, down and above, and beyond their universes... and then... awake... anew... a light."

    (Don't worry, I gave you the credit for this triad. :) )
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]

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