I liked this, very original and different than other works ive read, i loved reading it. This is not a conventional piece and i dont think it can be judged as such. A lot of origionality here although i have to agree what has been said about the flow. It can be improved i believe into a great piece but then again i rarely change my work once it has been laid down, dont know about you? Anyways an enjoyable read, looking forward to more... Thank you for sharing.