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    dots Submission Name: The Vallydots
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    Author: TheCure91
    ASL Info:    100/assexual/in your but
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/5/8
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Vallydots
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    Im fallin
    Down a black hole
    I see your shadow
    don’t know if its you

    Im in a green valley
    I see your shadow
    don’t now if its you

    I gaze into
    The gates of your soul

    I fall again
    I don’t know what im doing

    Confused

    I see your shadow it leads me threw

    Is it you


    What do I do



    Am I
    Falling
    Down the
    Stares of love



    The black and white crabs are back

    Pinching my back

    How do I end this flack


    Lead me away …………….





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      yay second comment
    not like i'm waitin tho..
    Another great one.

    Awesome Hay
    | Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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