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    dots Submission Name: The Vallydots

    Author: TheCure91
    ASL Info:    100/assexual/in your but
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/5/8
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Vallydots

    Im fallin
    Down a black hole
    I see your shadow
    don’t know if its you

    Im in a green valley
    I see your shadow
    don’t now if its you

    I gaze into
    The gates of your soul

    I fall again
    I don’t know what im doing


    I see your shadow it leads me threw

    Is it you

    What do I do

    Am I
    Down the
    Stares of love

    The black and white crabs are back

    Pinching my back

    How do I end this flack

    Lead me away …………….

    Submitted on 2008-10-24 03:22:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    not like i'm waitin tho..
    Another great one.

    Awesome Hay
    | Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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