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    dots Submission Name: I Trydots
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    Author: TheCure91
    ASL Info:    100/assexual/in your but
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/5/8
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Trydots
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    I try
    To realize
    Your eyes
    Which are harmed by the sky


    I try
    To realize
    Your pain
    What do you gain????!!!!

    Come into my world
    And take me for who I really am

    Come into my house
    And clean this mess I made


    I see
    But I can’t be
    Everything
    You want me too see

    I plead
    But I can’t see
    Everything you want me to be


    Come into my world
    And take me for who I really am

    Come into my house
    And clean this mess I made

    Come into my world
    And take me for who I really am

    Come into my house
    And clean this mess I made

    I try
    To realize…….




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