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    dots Submission Name: To Move Ondots

    Author: grimmreaper
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 122/43/23
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       i dug as deep as i could inside and this is what i pulled out today

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    dotsTo Move Ondots

    A boy named Jacob Hess
    Hung him self.

    Every time a student commits suicide,
    The school has a big assembly
    Where everyone is forced to come
    And talk about their feelings
    On this person killing themselves.

    They tell us,
    That its good to get it out
    Too not hold it inside.

    A few people will raise their hand
    Cry a few tears,
    Yell a few words,
    But really
    Its all crap.
    Letting it out
    Will only bring you more pain,
    And more tears.

    It only reminds you,
    Of how you felt and why.
    Talking about it,
    Only shows people
    That you are in pain,
    It only lets the world know
    That you hurt.

    What good is that gonna do?
    The world doesn’t care!
    No one cares!

    People die every day,
    Weather its suicide,
    Car accident,
    But it happens,
    And it happens to everyone.
    And when it does
    The last thing that you need
    Is a giant assembly of crying people
    And teachers telling you to let it out.

    The best thing you can do
    Is forget
    And move on.

    No matter how many tears you cry
    No matter how many scars you cutt
    No matter how many pillows you scream in
    It’s not gonna bring the person back.
    Nothing will.
    They are gone forever,
    And for as hard as it is to except
    We are forced to.

    At least
    All this
    Is what I try to tell myself.
    Normally it works,
    And it fights back the tears
    But today…

    I didnt know Jacob all that well
    He was in my home room last year.
    All I really knew about him
    Was that his father was an alcoholic
    And his mother had left,
    Thats all,
    Nothing close or personal.
    Nothing that I should really care about

    But yet…

    Why does my stomach feel tied up
    Into tight gripping knots,
    And why does my cheeks feel wet?

    If I didnt really care

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      My fav was always when the people that were the ones most likely to make a person want to cried the hardest, then the next day they were back at it with a new toy.
    | Posted on 2008-11-07 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]

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