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    dots Submission Name: Space Shipsdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    dotsSpace Shipsdots
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    Space Ships

    To be out amongst the stars
    to hold in view the sublime lights of origination
    and see in my tiny palm
    a shinning galactic heart
    I a grain of sand
    imagining by distance
    to be an ocean

    To be out amidst the stars
    where nebula and mote
    experience birth and death
    in endless time
    to feel all initiation surrounding me
    and I like some pre antiquarian fish
    gliding with ease

    To be gathered with the stars
    and shuck off the bond of gravity
    to let loose the constraints of imagination
    to discover the vistas of a universal nation
    and so passing unhindered to eternity
    encountering actual life

    To be out riding with the stars
    never again to be constrained
    to peer through clouds
    instead to witness the spectacle
    the awesome unrepeatable dimensions
    in the monumental beauty of our true abode

    To be out there with the stars
    and be in part the eyes and ears of my author
    an intelligence exulting made perfection
    understanding that from the smallest
    to the incomprehensibly endless
    to become a grain of sand
    I am born in the celestial furnaces

    To be there
    just to be there
    out there with the stars
    and contain in my eye the reality of being
    all the empirical majesty of conceptions creation
    to hold in my survey
    if only for a moment
    my parent and my home




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    ||| Comments |||
      Granted, the poem is called space ships but the way you elaborate on it, to me it seems more as if you are describing the universe through the eyes of God as if describing some divine metaphysics. Again, the concept leaves me breathless but this time everything is put together perfectly and I won't be quoting all the lines I found spectacular for the sole purpose of stopping myself to copy and paste the entire poem. A favorite.
    | Posted on 2008-10-25 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      i was rocketship once and it was nothing like that. The stars were all different colors and fighting with eachother as i flew amongst them attempting to dodge their blows and sometimes failing. It was by far not what was described in this piece.
    | Posted on 2008-10-25 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]


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