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    dots Submission Name: Chaos dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Chaos ( This new science is a science of poetry )

    A straight line spirals all things formed spirally around patterns of creations universal principal painted pallet of spirals Perception presents a limited solid the object individualized by imprints of the total is spiraled Chaos individualized perfection total chaos universal order chaos balance of discord and rhythm never once repeating the synergistic pattern


    Chaos law creating and creation chaotic order The point at which awareness enters pivots at the onset of turbulence awareness turbulence touch of mind the finger of God the movement moment point of issue and centre in a spiral The pattern repeated galactic shape spins spirals DNA to fractal forms in a spiral all a product to produce of individual and individualized perfection !!

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      Actually, Chaos Theory states that chaos is the illusion of ununderstood order. :)

    I guess, this is the case here too. The 'poem' is very 'clear' in my opinion. A little too much centered on the idea of fractals. I also missed some puctuation - but it is perhaps in the intent of the author, to let 'minds' find the 'order'.

    I like the recurring alliterations.
    | Posted on 2008-10-25 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I do see a single truth that stands out in this particular piece that perplexes the mind: the problems with perception. Since your writing is called chaos it is, perhaps, only fitting that the write itself IS chaos. I see a lot of technical terms or phrases all intertwined. Normally, they should form a comprehensive reading but I suppose that isn't the purpose of this. In the midst of all the reader simply gets lost in the 'noise of the connectionless mechanism of expressions'.
    | Posted on 2008-10-25 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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