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    dots Submission Name: A Horticulturalists Dreamdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 402
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA Horticulturalists Dreamdots
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    A Horticulturalists Dream

    Green
    Dreams on Green
    Leafy swayed his heart
    In blazoned flower
    Sifted the moisture
    Of kissing cuddling colour

    Sexy even
    In their craggy darkly come hither looks
    And secret petal nooks
    Pondered on description
    By cell and Endoplasmic reticulum
    And his borrowed breathing

    Of Oxygen

    But burnished dewy stalk
    The patina and the talk of blades
    Corner appreciation
    And will not let him loose
    From feather frond
    Hours pass in the hearts of lilies

    And snap dragon eyelids
    Flutter and bat coyly
    Enticing bees Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm sexy
    Even crunches soil between his teeth
    Pollen honeyed
    With photosynthesis atomic energy

    Green
    Dreams on Green
    Signed by sentient perfumery
    Tending roots in their fine filigree
    Eating Earth
    And dining on his soul

    Of Sunshine

    Enchantment between the heads and tips
    The veins of flora his blood captivates
    A soft furl birthed by seed
    And strident proclamations made by trees
    Even by roadside weeds
    He dreams on Green










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      I liked this poem, it has a nice sound to it and I thought it had good flow. I liked your occasional scientific references, they really add to the poem. I really liked it how the rhyming was so open ended, and wasn't forced, it felt natural.
    Also, it was nice reading a poem which isn't so opinionated for a change and just states the world for the natural beauty it possesses.

    I'm a sucker for nature, and this poem just made me smile :):):)
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by Giddy | [ Reply to This ]
      Your pieces are like mine - they get views but rarely comments? What's up with that?

    This was a tight rap or would be a great piece for reading outloud at open mic night.

    You always seem to take things outside of the norm and I appreciate that!

    Great!


    love,peace,joy,abundnace & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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