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    dots Submission Name: Now X Wifedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsNow X Wifedots
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    Now X Wife

    Sing to me then your sad sorry song
    my ears long to be free of silence
    show me then cold winter dawn
    my eyes ache with your absence
    touch me then with tears that have flown
    down the face of reminiscence
    in this colourless world where no light or love can be held
    bring me nothing but sorrow to bind us

    Cleave to me a grey body of steel
    an iron heart to feel all the intense emptiness between us




    Submitted on 2008-10-25 19:23:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, I guess I've never really opened my eyes to things like this before. Of course, at my age, concepts of such adult matters seem trivial, but soon it'll be our generation following the footsteps of the broken-hearted.

    I liked your poem, it served well as a reality check to minds as naive as mine.

    Keep dreaming, keep writing

    ~Love Iffy
    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, divorce or separation or parting of ways from growing apart can be difficult and there are always lessons we can learn and we must just grow and move on appreciating the good times.

    Good!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    | Posted on 2008-10-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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