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    dots Submission Name: ANXIETYdots

    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 935
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       fear of the unknown while blinded by anxiety

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    They want me to go to a place I have never seen,
    Tell me Mum, “Is it right?” you know what I mean,
    I`m anxious of what they will do with me,
    Anxious of what will happen once I disagree.

    I do have my problems this I know well,
    But am afraid to travel, to visit another hell.
    I am safe in my flat away from all harm,
    I will not trust them with all their smarmy charm.

    My anxiety shakes me, I`m scared, full of fear,
    They will want what`s inside me what I hold so dear.
    Name rank and number is all I`ll give,
    But in the end, they`ll help me, help me to re-live.

    Submitted on 2008-10-27 19:55:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When I read this I see inside a concentration camp. The isles of cells hollowed out into the walls and the bonkers for all the workers, I see a man held without his will, forced to give up what he believes and to give up what he doesnt want others to know. But thats only what I see when I read this.

    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]

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