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    dots Submission Name: Surfing With White Whalesdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 771
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsSurfing With White Whalesdots
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    Surfing With White Whales

    Today a heavy sky above the sea shimmers
    From white washed black to emerald surfing
    The matching torrents of deepening waters
    Lost in the distance of a bated rains marauding

    And countless pristine whales
    Are breaching their pure white flanks
    Diving with the wind by coastal funnels
    Beneath the clouds in their grey and weighted ranks

    Single beach line bird goes wheeling
    As a forgotten song through the glooming light
    With the white whales falling and rising
    Disappearing out of sight

    Out beyond the break wall and the harbor
    The edge of the world defies belief
    Darkly they roll for a century of murder
    And a million white whales cruising beneath










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       col13x... Wow...wow...wow This piece is just bloody unreal i love googol This is going straight to my fav's list.

    I chose to read this piece because of your title , being a surfer and lover of the ocean i just couldn't help myself.

    I wouldn't change a thing in this one is is perfect 5StaRs

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    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      We are going to go to the coast in November to see the whales make their journey!

    I really enjoyed this piece and I could envision the whales singing their own song along the way!

    Great job!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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