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    Author: joy7542
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 1034/952/203
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    irrational, I know I am

    It was...

    I shouldn't have, I couldn't have not,

    movements and my mind saying no,

    Am I stronger for the cure? Am I weaker for cause?

    irrational. unnessisary. wrong.

    be stronger.

    strength is found in numbers, strength is found within

    yet, all I have are letters, words, barried in a caculated scale of right

    or wrong.

    no numbers, no depth, no strength.

    irrational,

    the emotional act of one who, with no holds on time or manner, tells you they care.




    Submitted on 2008-10-28 14:48:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Strange. I like the use of contradictions here to help create a feeling of deep seeded confusion and doubt. This is a very original piece and is very well done as is. I would say it feels perfectly finished already. I would like to encourage you to flush this out though. I think you could go a little deeper here, or start from the same place and see where it takes you next time. Nice write in its own right though.
    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      aww,I think you should give yourself more credit now honestly...

    you wrote a nice poem did you not?

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]



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