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    dots Submission Name: My Name Badge Is Falling Offdots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 787



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    dotsMy Name Badge Is Falling Offdots
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    My Name Badge Is Falling Off


    Walking through the doors to make more money
    Do I need the money this much?
    Another inane customer
    Asking if I work here?
    Why else would I be standing behind the counter
    Its not because I’m a failed writer….

    My name badge is falling off
    And its not by accident
    I might have made an adjustment


    Walking to the staff room, break from the dull
    I’d rather be on the dole
    One more obnoxious customer
    Asking for the price
    Why didn’t your mother use a contraceptive device
    Is she as silly as I am?

    My name badge is in your office
    And the uniform too
    I’ve got better thing to pursue




    Submitted on 2008-10-29 00:04:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's pretty cool, it's very realistic and a lot of people can probably relate to it. awesome work
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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