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Love is like a Rose.


Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
ASL Info:    22/f/PA
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104
Words: 39
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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Love is like a Rose.



Love is like a rose;
The firm stem grows as it supports,
Petals hug with affection,
And the smell lingers-
Emanating from the skin of a lover;
Hue of blushing brides.
Transforms to night,
Wilts and dies.




Submitted on 2008-10-29 02:25:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The only thing I would change is the title and the first line and maybe the blushing brides... they are clichés; imho... all done and redone to death. But I like what follows (minus the blushing bride). I don't have any real alternatives to give you. But I think the piece has a chance with an edit.


The firm stem grows as it supports,
Petals hug with affection,
And the smell lingers-
Emanating from the skin of a lover;
[blushing hues]. (?)
Transforms to night,
Wilts and dies.



| Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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