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    dots Submission Name: Love is like a Rose.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 798
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    dotsLove is like a Rose.dots
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    Love is like a rose;
    The firm stem grows as it supports,
    Petals hug with affection,
    And the smell lingers-
    Emanating from the skin of a lover;
    Hue of blushing brides.
    Transforms to night,
    Wilts and dies.




    Submitted on 2008-10-29 02:25:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The only thing I would change is the title and the first line and maybe the blushing brides... they are clichés; imho... all done and redone to death. But I like what follows (minus the blushing bride). I don't have any real alternatives to give you. But I think the piece has a chance with an edit.


    The firm stem grows as it supports,
    Petals hug with affection,
    And the smell lingers-
    Emanating from the skin of a lover;
    [blushing hues]. (?)
    Transforms to night,
    Wilts and dies.



    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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