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Cry To the World

Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
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i know, i know definetly a work in progress....
but let me know your comments

Cry To the World

Cry to the world

Tell them of your pains and sorrows
Force them to see what they have done to you

Tell them how the days of old are gone
When everything made sense
and when the road to take was clear

A new age has begun
Its time to face the truth
The past that once was
Shall never be again

In this new age
I have no idea who I am
I'm dragging a corpse of the girl I used to be
She's a burden, a constant reminder of the past

I've changed and I don't want to go back
I've kept the best things of me
The things I loved and felt made me me

I'm tired of people pointing to the mirror and saying that that's not me

Cry to the world to leave the corpse rest in peace

Tell them to embrace the past
Keep it stored as a good memory
but don't project it into this new age

The road has been taken
This is who I am
No apologies

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  so are you trying to forget the past and what you used to be? or is it that people don't accept who your are? thats my interpretation of your poem. although i feel differently about this, i think it was a very nice poem. my favorite part was the ending stanza:
The road has been taken
This is who I am
No apologies
how you talked about your kid-self as a corpse is different but it creates a powerful picture.
great job, and let me know when your done with it.:D
| Posted on 2008-10-31 00:00:00 | by tricklingrain | [ Reply to This ]
  the poem is not bad, like you say it is not yet are writing about how you have broken with the past and now you are taking a new road, leading a new life and you are right when you say no apoligies at the end of the poem, it,s your life. now you have decided to put in down in print, a cry to the world , i like the titel, maybe you should put in some metaphors or visions to describe your feelings better, the line about the corpse, i would personnaly change that for something better, a metaphor maybe, you know like "monkey on my back" (the only one that springs to my mind)something like that. like you said it is still in writting and the idea, theme is good, i,m sure you can make it much better.
thanks for sharing
take care
| Posted on 2008-10-29 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]

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