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    dots Submission Name: Depressiondots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       was in that state recently


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    dotsDepressiondots
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    Depression is a state of mind
    Its the feeling that there is no tomorrow
    Like the world is coming to an end
    Like your life's purpose is not understood,
    Not fully established or fulfilled
    Its the turning of the tides when you feel like drifting off into oblivion
    When you wished for one moment that you had wings,
    To escape this emotional prison which you are locked into
    Its when loneliness takes a shape,
    And suicidal thoughts become rational thinking.
    Its when every corner turned leads to a dead end,
    Forcing you to start over again,
    An action which can be tiresome and can eventually lead to disappointment

    The struggle continues however in the mind,
    The battle between mind and body,
    The warfare that never ceases,
    This can only lead to a tragic end
    Or to sanity




    Submitted on 2008-10-30 05:29:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravissimo a friend of mine on here (razor2therosary) said that bad things ispire good peices, this is one such occassion. Really nice personal description here, and i like how you ended it with a hint of light. First class. Hope this lifted your spirits.

    Giving you wings to fly,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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