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    dots Submission Name: THIS IS WHYdots
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    Author: SAGITTREVEALED
    ASL Info:    22/m/ P.C. FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 26/26/16
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsTHIS IS WHYdots
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    Why do i love thee? for all the reasons i always say.
    How do i love thee? with all the things i needn't tell.
    all the time spent together,talking,laughing,and all the other little things that only dig me deeper.
    The time apart that inevitably comes, only confirms that not even gods themselves can rip me from your eternity,only that could be my HELL.
    Only in the brilliant light given off in your presence,can one truely understand the shadows cast upon your soul.
    Only in your darkness can i see the sunshine that burns through the clouds of your past as they still take a costly toll.
    I see you fall,and get back up. you curse, then laugh as if to tempt all fate and finally make them see.
    You can hold upon yourself in all things ,and when you can't, then look beside you, to help you up and hold you tight, there i'll always be.
    I am blessed the luckiest and of all my days upon this earth, only you, none other, has like this, made me feel.
    you are the prize, within my eyes, and you love me beyond all belief, and show me with all the kisses you give so warmly, the ones i claim to steal.

    THIS AND MANY MORE TO COME, IS WRITTEN (THOUGH NOT VERY WELL)EXCLUSIVELY FOR THE GODDESS THAT HAS ALWAYS RULED MY DREAMS.
    FOR YOU CAROL




    Submitted on 2008-10-30 06:08:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you'll do better capturing my little Sekhmet in words before long...hmmm...watch out for my Baby's claws, though. she sharpened them on my heart before she tread the nursery floors.


    yes, she is a living Goddess....all of my Spawn are infallible deities.

    Gnu is the Trickster, i'm sure you know which one.

    my Karrie, is the Protectress, like Kali (and me), and often misunderstood...like Kali (and me).

    and Squeakie, she's the Huntress with a tiny bow and minions to boot.

    do not fail my Precious Child...she demands perfection.
    do not show weakness, or she will grow bored and contempteous.

    offer her strength and trust and watch that she does not become distracted from her studies.

    she was meant for greatness, and must fulfill her destiny.

    and respect my Perfect Child.

    always respect her.
    | Posted on 2008-11-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      How do I describe Perfection? You.
    How do I describe it's offspring? Your Words.
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I, Myself, shall critique my first submission.
    1 THE WORDS CAN'T SAY WELL ENOUGH THE WAY I FEEL!
    2 THE SUBJECT (CAROL) IS MORE PERFECT THAN ANY WORDS CAN DESCRIBE.
    3 I AM DISSAPOINTED IN THIS ATTEMPT AT CAPTURING THE ESSANCE OF THAT EARTH-BOUND GODDESS!
    4 MY MIND WORKS IN WAYS, I FEAR, ONLY SHE COULD EVER BE ABLE TO UNDERSTAND.
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]


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