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    dots Submission Name: A Question of Cannon Fodderdots

    Author: col13x
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    dotsA Question of Cannon Fodderdots

    A Question of Cannon Fodder

    Drenched in the blood
    Wept in raining puddles of agony
    The wretched and forgotten
    Mud of centuries
    He fell by knees and palms
    Dead to the feet of living
    A Splashing tattoo of scarlet drumming
    On the futile embrace
    Of histories life spent warring

    Driven by battle
    Riffle, bomb, bow, lance, cannon, arrow and missile

    And to thunderous skies
    Where blasted shell burst wreaked its revenge of lies
    Turned his eyes
    And to heavens stars of eternal bliss
    As to permanent darkness
    Raised his fists

    And cried to the voice
    Of perpetual emptiness
    And ever unanswered promises
    A question of tears
    Raised from a single heart inside a human chest
    Screamed in hopelessness


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      Wow! Very dramatic and with a visual feeling that was like a powerful punch in the chest - knocking out breath!

    Why do we enjoy pain & suffering and violence? Human nature?

    I'm sticking with rainbows, rivers, respect and love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share

    Great job!
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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