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    dots Submission Name: Persephone; Empress of The Falldots

    Author: col13x
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    dotsPersephone; Empress of The Falldots

    Persephone; Empress of The Fall

    They are living balustrades reaching out to incognito riddles
    Hidden in the maze by branches arching with caresses
    Where promiscuous light is falling gentle fingers to their pools
    Tiny cloisters of remembering summers thriving as it passes

    Pathways lead on arching in vaulted corridors
    With the fluttering of their bright children
    Commend their sleepy coloured carpet to the forest floors
    Blessings for the Empress attending farewell songs for her season

    Her crown a catch of sun fall flows about embrocated head
    Rusty red She glides bathed feet dancing on a fluid mist
    With a lullaby of soothing drowsy to send tired roots to their quiet bed
    The blue bell flash of eyes shine promises somnolent buds their cousins will not be missed

    Through the colonnades and halls pervades a sentient peace
    As age-ed as the stone ring set within the frosted glitter grass
    As creatures tuck their tails in the curls of winters invocation of sleep
    This years tale of folklore is written by snowflakes as they pass

    Persephone is wandering and in all her aspect changing
    The enchanted incantations of palingenesis whispering kindly to the soil
    Her memories of the verdant centuries in viridian awakening
    And from her downy mossy pillow emerges with the blue bell

    The farewell song is over it has gathered all to her protection
    And the promise she lays at the ancient foundation of the forest feet
    Her offering to their sunlight children who fed life’s diligent exultation
    A salute to all the majesty of a single fallen leaf

    ( The falling leaf Persephone
    Her heaven in the canopy returns to the underworld
    Save in the Fall she is for a moment; free
    When all her beauty in multitudinous glory is beheld )

    Submitted on 2008-10-30 20:38:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your excellent descriptions of the scenes and your use of metaphors is just tantalizing. It was quite interesting to look outside and see the leaves changing as I read this...=]
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Had to fav this ode to the goddess of changing seasons!

    Your use of vocabulary and vivid imagery was joyful and humble and magical.

    Great with my cup of rose tea listening to the rain!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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