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    dots Submission Name: roller coaster ridedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 806
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    Description:
       trying to finish this poem 2nd draft, please commemt any thing would help


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    dotsroller coaster ridedots
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    one thousand lines
    one thousand rhymes
    i let my ink bleed from my pen
    to show you whats on my mind.

    heart racing, pulse rising, suffacting
    cardiac arrest
    it's emergency
    can't you see
    baby you are my i.v.

    Up and down
    round and round
    side to side
    emotional roller coaster we ride
    disagreements, broken promises, arguing
    but as the sun sets,the stars and the moon meet
    I can't live without you
    when you are my life line.

    one in a million
    something is not right
    for every other guy to pass you bye.
    on bending knee
    staring up at my beautiful Queen
    leaving a love not ever felt
    going though my body
    like a i.v.

    i dont ever wanna to stop loving you girl
    so dont stop being my world
    love me, hold me, hear me
    be there because i need a my I.V.




    Submitted on 2008-10-31 01:26:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this piece alot.
    You've definately gotten your point accross..
    The diction is great, and states the obvious connection between you and this girl..
    | Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by danni_amazing | [ Reply to This ]


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