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Author: Jaiknob
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jsut randomly developpin' a scene while thinkin'...


It's as if his whole body just got hit by a powerful wind. He feels his body jerk back and hit the surface. Although it's soft, only his head feels the softness.
As the blood rushes about, his head aches. It becomes so heavy that he believes that if it was weighed, it would be definitely thrice as normal.
First, everything expanded but now it feels as if everything is contracting. But his head remains the out casted one. It's as if information are pouring
in yet he has no idea of anything.
Suddenly his eyes open. Learning as fast as possible, he retains this function and applies the method again. And again until he masters the act.
Not so fascinated by the opening and closing of his eyes, his mind now wanders to what the eye can do after the lid is off. The sight finally hits
him and for that quick second, his body stops aching but it was just the attention directed to the view and the pain is ignored. 'I've seen this before but where?', his first thought,'Why can't I remember anything?' He's
quite surprised by the fact that he realized he's unable to recall. Connecting the links, he ends up at the action of communicating. He attempts by first searching the way to open his mouth. He gives up after a while but gets back on his query after finding his solution to opening his mouth due to gasping caused by a movement in his surroundings. After breathing through his mouth, he experiments and finally reaches his goal; He is able to talk.
He stares at his body for a while as his surroundings is memorized and no longer interest him. Thinking hard, leading to concentration, he's able to move his finger. Slowly, he shifts his hand and ends up with his arm moving.
Discovering new actions every few minutes, he feels like he's been blessed and very talented. His thoughts are suddenly interrupted by the realization of his being at this spot is not a good thing. This realization of his is
then hit by understandings and his pain just adds up to the confusion...

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