You come quietly so I can't hear
suddenly whispering in my ear.
I feel how you look at me
feel how you bite painfully like a bee.
Then without a word you fade away
like a fog what's dark and gray.
You leave me alone with my mind
what's so confused and blind.
Shivering softly like a green leaf
with pain inside and with a grief.
hey... simplicity isn't always the best thing to do. you are talented i can see that u've got your figurative language down and you meter is decent... push it. pust it.
Don't be so safe... are you relatively new i haven't seen u b4.. then again there are alot of people on here.. just asking...
This was short but beautiful. I liked it very much. I can relate to this very closely. The detail painted an image in my mind.
Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading
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