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    dots Submission Name: A DEDICATION TO CRY......dots

    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       A poem that was promised for a dear young lady who many may know....

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    dotsA DEDICATION TO CRY......dots

    Why do you cry, is not the statement that it seems,
    It’s the name of a young lady who writes poetry in reams.
    Dark is her style on depression and death,
    We all know she has more talent, so my dear try Macbeth.

    She is one dear young lady that does great reviews,
    Giving out guidelines and sometimes bad news.
    But for me this young lady has been kind and sincere,
    Twenty two poems darling, Ha! Wait till the end of the year.

    Our minds ages apart, yet our poetry so near,
    This young lady writes with éclat and without fear.
    With images sort in our own minds eye,
    So here is my ode to dear little cry.

    Submitted on 2008-10-31 21:58:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww i'm tearing up. That was really good. I loved it. Thank you...

    I have one question tho. It's not about the poem but do u no why these have come up It’s, éclat. I see them alot now a days ina lot of poems...

    "Dark is her style on depression and death,
    We all know she has more talent, so my dear try Macbeth."

    HaHa yea i will try sumthing new... Im guna try to spice up my poetry so people don't get bored with my pieces.

    Thank you again for so much. I really appreciate yours adivce and reviwes you have given me. Maybe sumday I'll rite you a poem Jamar...hint hint... hehe. Keep yours eyes pealed haha.

    Great Job! It was beautifully crafted and written!

    | Posted on 2008-11-02 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]

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