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    dots Submission Name: here's an apple. don't eat it yetdots
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    Author: meoww
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    dotshere's an apple. don't eat it yetdots
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    i think i gave up my childhood
    the time i called my mother

    a bitch. a flying bleach container
    to the face. and boy, did i

    deserve it. i forget how old i was.
    old enough to know that word

    was bad. young enough to be
    foolhardy to say it. scream it. and

    mean it. today, i look back on that,
    and say "sorry mama, for all

    i've done. i've been sinful. i've lied.
    i've smoked pot and imbibed numerous

    illegal substances. i've driven too fast.
    blind-drunk and with passengers

    fearful for their lives. i'm sorry mama.
    i'm sorry for saying that now."




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      I'll never forget the first time I slipped and cussed, using my mother's favorite word. It hung between us, I was screaming and crying about a lock on the door I couldn't open, and I remember FEELING her presence before she opened that door and asked me what I said.... oh god, LOL. I remember thinking that woman would never stop swinging her arms and slapping me stupid. My whole head roared, and my skin burned for days.

    In retrospect, that took a real [censored] to do that.
    | Posted on 2009-09-22 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      You can just taste the regret
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone I know, including Self here, has bit off that apple rather hastily and with a foolhardy zest. It's good though that most of us have durable brakes and screech to a halt and have a sober moment to look around (reflection and insight - the esteemed sages would term) then we kick off again, full gear, head on to the next misadventure.... such is life.
    | Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      here's a corpse
    don't bury it yet

    let the sorrow ooze
    for all to see

    here's remorse
    don't feel it yet

    let pain name her love
    before she bows to weep
    | Posted on 2008-11-02 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Great how you wrote this like a non-stop thought flashing through your mind. Even though you included punctuation I guess it's the absolute absence of capitals that make it seem so. I don't know, I just like the way it reads.
    Had a million of these thoughts myself but never have I put them in verse the way you have here.

    Dare I say it and look stupid? Yea, why not. Okay... what's the apple have to do with the poem itself? Anything? or just a random title?

    Enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2008-11-01 00:00:00 | by TamarRoze | [ Reply to This ]
      I assume that you're a 90s child.



    When I was young, I used to tell my best friend that I wish he'd die so I can finally have a reason to mourn. And he did.

    I always hated apples.
    | Posted on 2008-11-01 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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