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    dots Submission Name: Coffee Consumption Addictiondots
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    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I hate being awake at 2am in the morning


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    dotsCoffee Consumption Addictiondots
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    Wrote me a guide for those whose life eaten by insomnia
    Treated by senseless medication and deliria
    Put in constant awareness, trapped in rapid hysteria
    Overruled by self suspicion and sudden amnesia

    Put me in sleep instantly, put me to unconsciousness
    I dreamt myself would faint in days to come
    Release me from those holding hands
    Hands which deliver me nothing but fear

    It resulting in a sudden strike of epilepsy
    A rare kind of fit which is incurable
    Double vision and mental slowing they want it on me
    Such side-effects, such atrocity even Nazi never dare

    Caffeine






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