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    dots Submission Name: Vonnegut's Dreamdots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsVonnegut's Dreamdots

    To earth i confess my silence
    witnessed by the arch of rainbow
    And then the hymn and the dance

    To sky i offer my condolence
    witnessed by the eyes in sorrow
    and then the war and then blood

    I shed my tears to the useless existence
    For those species which later sink in extinction
    I drown myself in guilt for common sense
    For being the reason of extermination

    To the sea i let myself shattered
    Welcomed by the sunbathed water glow
    and then dive and then rest

    To the woods i pay my tribute
    welcomed by seeds of trees i sowed
    and then the march and parades

    Ended by the funeral of mass carcasses
    Died of natural selection or intended genocide
    The glancing sunlight on blood pond
    Reflects the souls which were put aside

    Submitted on 2008-10-31 22:50:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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