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    dots Submission Name: interlude dots
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    Author: TheCure91
    ASL Info:    100/assexual/in your but
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/5/8
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 585
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 465



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       this was from a rock opra i was writing but do to the lack of female singers i could find i couldnt finish it but maybe i will add the rest later in time


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    dotsinterlude dots
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    i cants see through light
    i cant see through darkness

    everything obvious
    is rocket science

    i dont know your name
    i dont feel the same

    i dont wannabe around
    except when your around

    could this be love
    could this be hate

    i feel wierd
    i dont feel sincere
    i feel love i feel hate

    I REALLY WANT YOU!!!

    j.j.palntz.




    Submitted on 2008-11-01 15:33:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol very confusing. But written very well. I could feel the wanting to know and the yearning for someone to answer. Keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-11-02 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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