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    dots Submission Name: Feelingdots
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    Author: TheCure91
    ASL Info:    100/assexual/in your but
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/5/8
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 789
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1182



    Description:
       this is one of my older songs it just show how much i have progressed as a writer


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    dotsFeelingdots
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    dreaming of the past
    things that were beautiful
    things that were right
    things that jut might
    have been real

    sleaping all night just
    thinking of what could have been
    my whole day wrecked
    because i just cant stop the thoughts of you

    (chorus)
    oh the feeeling
    of feeling
    something real
    the feeling of being
    near you
    is just so true

    (v2)

    i see over time
    youve really grown more beautiful i see
    i jut want to hold you
    but i know time has grown between us
    the old momories
    and reveries
    all the old tings
    everthing that used to be good
    misssing the feeling of tranquility
    missing the feeling of love
    missing everything of you
    and reminising
    all about what we did
    think of how it could have been

    (CHORUS)

    (refrain)

    i just wanna hold you
    but time has seprated us
    i will try to fill the gap
    i will always be hear

    (solo)
    (CHORUS)
    (end)





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