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    dots Submission Name: Adventure of a Lifetimedots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsAdventure of a Lifetimedots
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    An explorer in a forbidden underground jungle,
    A maze of dangers left and right.
    I listened to the dim voices,
    And the creaking in the trees that surrounded me.

    On a mission to get to where there was comfort-
    Dee was there, smiling at me;
    Her smile could light up all the rooms
    I stoped to linger, and then I smiled back at her,
    My offering of love.

    A smile turned to laughter,
    And laughter turned to tears.

    The lines of reality are blurred when you’re a child
    And you forget that the underground jungle is a table.
    Ouch.





    Submitted on 2008-11-02 01:19:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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