This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Adventure of a Lifetime

Author: Roula
ASL Info:    18/female
Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46 /64 /45
Words: 105
Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
Total Views: 1112
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 660


Adventure of a Lifetime

An explorer in a forbidden underground jungle,
A maze of dangers left and right.
I listened to the dim voices,
And the creaking in the trees that surrounded me.

On a mission to get to where there was comfort-
Dee was there, smiling at me;
Her smile could light up all the rooms
I stoped to linger, and then I smiled back at her,
My offering of love.

A smile turned to laughter,
And laughter turned to tears.

The lines of reality are blurred when you’re a child
And you forget that the underground jungle is a table.

Submitted on 2008-11-02 01:19:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?