now, this didn't flow as well- but it seemed to fit the point; the raw, almost choked out feel of some spots and the fiercely quick pace of others. like there's this constant mix of rage and despair and an odd sense of confusion each begging for attention throughout the write.
I liked it, the entire way through it felt like a visual assault, definitely no rest for cross stops. It'd be an interesting movie scene, a small series of intense flashbacks, maybe at the beginning of the movie. Sort of like in the crow when he touched certain things, except about x10 more intense and x10 more fast paced as well. All in all not a bad write at all =] feels good to be reading your stuff more again- I've read everything you've ever posted at least once already, but yeah.
Submission Name: comorbidity
