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    dots Submission Name: Tell medots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    dotsTell medots
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    I ask you this,
    What is your definition of Happiness?
    What makes you,
    What gives birth to your thoughts,
    what makes you real and what makes you not?
    Tell me.
    Give me every thought,
    Or your heart,
    [I will wear it on my sleeve]
    But, oh,
    Please just tell me.

    Tell me what is,
    and what isn't.
    And why things make sense.
    Pull me close and whisper.
    or pull me close and scream.
    I know why this became,
    what this has become.
    But, tell me your side
    of the littlest things.
    Oh, what could this all mean?

    So for Christ's sake.
    For every fucking diety.
    Just let me know.
    Just tell me.
    Anything.




    Submitted on 2008-11-03 02:57:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is great keep up the good job. the feelings i get from is a Lust for knowledge. How you keep asking why over and over its a good thing. vent writing is a good way to help.
    | Posted on 2008-12-16 00:00:00 | by BloodLustKira | [ Reply to This ]
      Why do people always have criticism? It is because they are jealous of you I think. I will tell you anything just ask.
    Why should I scream when you are always close enough to touch.
    Luv to you always
    | Posted on 2008-11-14 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, myself, Little One.

    what's going on?
    is everything okay?

    has he displeased you, my Angel?
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the message or thought provoking aspect of this is really great. It just seemed a little too wordy and repetitive sometimes so I would maybe edit some and try to get a better poetic flow. I really like the "pull me close and whisper/or pull me close and scream" that's such a powerful line!
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by ImaginePeace | [ Reply to This ]


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