As this is is written, it is very attractive how it was devised. Sensual seasons, I like the idea of each season needing each other, in something less timid than affection a whole lot of writes are used.
Neath lay your desires???
Were they full filled?
I love how you placed such sensual feelings inside of this poem, not only is there portraits of excitment but it leads the reader (at least this reader for sure) for more, like a craving of some sort.
In tune to your beauty on this art, letting you know.
I don't think this needs more. I think, possibly, it needs less. I find that personification can be a somewhat over-played device in poetry and so care needs to be taken when using it. Of course that is my opinion, but that's all I'm entitled to right?
What I'm getting at is the poem feels overloaded with references to months and seasons. Here is a thought:
Nature sheds November's cloak
and stands naked
before an abrupt inconsiderate lover …
icy wind a cold caress …
unsatisfied, she seeks
the tender and needy adoration of March
and from this wet embrace
the season will slip from her womb …
green and alive.
Anyway, this is just my thought. I am not saying change it to this, I'm saying there are things you could do with this to bring out the stronger elements of the write. I really haven't altered much. In the first stanza you do not have to name winter to signify winter. We know that after November is winter, that winter can be described as you have described it. Just as we can gather that after march the weather warms, becomes more "alive".
Not sure if I totally over-explained myself there, but I worry that people will take offense.
I love that this is graphic and the final lines are intense and beautiful.
I like the idea, but I found the descriptions to be kind of graphic...and not in a good way, but that's just my preference. The writing is good though and very evocative of feelings like cold and harsh, then life and warm so overall i think this is a good write :)