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No More Youth


Author: ImaginePeace
ASL Info:    16/f/who knows?
Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 6 /4 /6
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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This is something personal that I felt I needed to express. Take whatever meaning from it you wish or what it means to you.


No More Youth



You wake up forgotten
Internal and sodden
drawing a dark, dark white, blank

The reception is fuzzy
The feelings are muddy
The confusion is true, and clear, and rank

Last night is still there
with his hands in your hair
and it's bruised, and it's fear, and it aches

What could have gone wrong
The mind picks up a song
and the soul knows what was taken

It was pure and it was saved,
but with fast slight of hand dazed,
and forever, eternally shaken

The night came on quickly,
seemingly sweet and shifty
and each angel's hope forsaken

You never forget
No, you never regret
that which you never knew
No memory for proof
No sensation for truth
No, No, No
No more youth.




Submitted on 2008-11-03 04:31:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmm I feel as though you purposley made it hard to follow to demonstrate how you feel which is clever. I like it.
| Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by KiHoodie | [ Reply to This ]


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