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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    the things that brought me
    here today.
    the same that brought me
    yesterday.

    a recurring haunting dream
    a life doesn't know me still
    It seems no matter how I try
    that chances are it never will.

    when others get their piece of mind
    I am left here still in search.
    The winding road I've walked this long
    has led me only to this hurt.

    what's a father, husband do
    when theres nothing left to be.
    what when all thats left inside
    is all that long since left from me.

    pitty? thats not what I want
    Help? the furthest from my mind
    all I want cannot be named
    nor has it been there to find.






    Submitted on 2008-11-03 05:59:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this. Flowed nicely, expressed yourself well. My kind of poem!
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]


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