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    dots Submission Name: Faking Apathydots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsFaking Apathydots
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    I let you

    So you pushed me down

    Onto the floor

    Lower than I thought

    I'd be

    What did I want to prove?

    That I was stronger than you

    A rock

    Same kind of heart

    That you can't breach

    Well, not that easy



    So I let you

    Now I'm wandering around

    A child in this dark alley way

    So far from the light

    That I thought would be here

    Quickly cherished

    Just as quickly

    Faking apathy

    And thrown away


    Why'd I let you?

    As if I didn't know

    As if I could bottle my pain like that pill

    So being used couldn't hurt me

    And no one's eyes really see me


    As if no one hurts me


    As if nothing will




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    ||| Comments |||
      This deftly tells the tale of how some consequenses surprise us by how different they are as compared to what we thought they would be!

    This aptly adresses a difficult subject with drama and feeling! There are many out there that will relate to this, and which this will help!
    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of plety of times I felt like I had to prove something slthough I knew I wasn't proving anything I orginally wanted to...great job
    | Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by KiHoodie | [ Reply to This ]


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