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    dots Submission Name: Only Lovedots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 611



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    dotsOnly Lovedots
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    Swings rustle in the background
    Our cordial meeting ground
    Take in the air and watch the night
    Ensnare us all around
    Entrance us deep into the dark
    As spiders silk and dew
    So deep I cant tell near from far
    I cant tell me from you

    Two hearts a beat set placidly
    As morning sirens sing
    Not parting till the sun could light
    Each watchful slide and swing

    Adrift in newfound waters
    This passion, lest we shove
    Our parting, never lonely

    No sadness

    Only love





    Submitted on 2008-11-04 01:39:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was a really nice piece! it has great rhythm, sonically sound, and a lover's message.

    i also thought that you've applied good imagery here. imagery is so important to me. the whole "tell" vs "show" deal. but it really does make or brake a poem for me. you have employed both quite skillfully here.


    ciao
    -jp

    thanks for the favorite add as well!
    | Posted on 2011-05-27 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. This made me feel very spring like. 8 out of 10. It was serious but friendly and I love that.
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by KiHoodie | [ Reply to This ]


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