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    dots Submission Name: The Fire Smothered by Forestdots
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    Author: SAGITTREVEALED
    ASL Info:    22/m/ P.C. FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 26/26/16
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Though it may say trapped, it is a labor of love and in no way meant to infer that she is the one whom hath trapped me. Only by her love do I know what it feels like to soar.


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    dotsThe Fire Smothered by Forestdots
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    Today the clouds passed slowly by
    And all I could ask is simply why?
    Why so long and why this long wait
    My world is motionless, in a frozen state.
    in thicket of root and vine, I am bound,
    in my fire she sees the one, only she has found.
    At the edge of the forest my earth nymph plays
    And I stuck here looking out only 56 more days.
    I Gleened a glimpse through the narrow trees
    I caught her scent on Winter's cold breeze.
    I saw her smile on the moon in the sky
    I heard her laughter as it wafted sweetly by.
    You have warmed my heart when frost starts to creep
    you have awakened my soul from Aeons of sleep.
    You're afraid that I slumber, that I'm caught in a dream
    How, When your love hits me like sunshine in unending stream.
    I wrestle with the thistle as I try to get free
    you, just there, under open sky,Waiting, calling to me.
    It has been said "All The World's a Stage."
    I know all's real as I struggle inside my Sylvan green cage.
    Lest I be smothered by vegitation, and my fire die out
    You urge me forward when you sing and you shout.
    How do I see what's real from what is not true
    It's easy my love, simply I look, lovingly to you.


    For My Love
    From Hers

    (and thank you Shakespeare, for the use of a few of your words)






    Submitted on 2008-11-04 09:48:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very beautiful....I can feel the love in it. Very explicit and I love the fact that you used the forest and fire....when i read the poem title I did not expect a love poem. It is very different but in a good way:)
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      And you say you aren't a poet?!?!
    This is beautiful.
    And, I love it.

    As I love you.

    <3, Yours
    | Posted on 2008-11-04 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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