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    dots Submission Name: Essentialdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsEssentialdots
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    Essential

    These things are essential

    Blood
    But there is no blood in our veins
    Water
    But we have no water
    Love
    Yet we do not have a heart
    Skin
    Though by natures design we have a different skin
    Freedom
    Though we are all enslaved
    Food
    Though by wealth and acquisition
    Its taste remains the same

    Love
    Through indifference carries a different name
    Love
    Through need turns to wanting all the same
    Love
    Inside a cell
    Love
    Drowns in the water of its own tears
    Love
    Is a skin of blood and heart
    Is a freedom to which we can become enslaved

    Food
    Though by wealth and acquisition
    The taste remains the same

    Blood
    There is pulsing through these veins
    Water
    A blue haven in which to drown
    Love
    Though we see love everyday
    Skin
    Though by devious swindle our skin is not the same
    Freedom
    A capitalist impression of wealth and religion

    Food
    Though by wealth and acquisition
    The taste remains the same





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      This piece is very timely considering election day - what we hope for and vote for - is that really what's going on? I think not - there is a lacking in our lives and in our societies and thus, at times, within ourselves.

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